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When I read the description, the first thing that came to my mind was " So basically a dumber, blood thirstier, Hunger Games." But the differences were that the people ...

I honestly didn't know what this was about. Was it a dream, nightmare...? I don't know. But hey, good job. I'm still trying to figure this one out... You're gonna ...

This made me laugh... then again it was satire and funny. I liked the ending. Just seemed right for another religion. Every religion has a hell, so it made sense... ...

Jumbo! I'm here to say that, you did a good job writing this, that I got so involved that I almost didn't notice one mistake, which you could fix very ...

Wow. First off I cannot believe that nobody's read this before. It's fantastic!!! You have a small problem with grammar, but I can get past that. This has great potential ...

Well, that was a surprising story. It was good, and frankly I liked how you made some of the character have accent. It was well done, and it brought on ...

Um...What is this story about? It gave me a clue at the prologue, but even then it was vague. It was a good story, don't get me wrong, but I ...

I like the theory of this. Death in this way does sound like Hell, though, but I liked it. Most religions would probably disagree, but who are we to judge ...

This is great!! A great work of writing, and a great work of story telling. No need to say the anything that were bad- there is none!!! I hope you ...

Love the twist. I like how you don't go into much detail about anything. Keeps the readers guess... The only bad thing about this is that abrupt ending. But it ...

What dreams? What ever happened to her father? Those are the questions you want people to ask. Great job, and keep on writing. I like how you chose her name, ...

Over all a good story, I would like more, IF it was a chapter, but it's not, so it is alright. And to point this out, what do you mean ...

I liked it there was a grammical mistake, but only one. Other than that I have high hopes for this novel. I really like the way you write, you just ...

It had an air of satire of it, my friend. I loved it. It was almost like a children's rhyme, yet it was pure and simple it wasn't. I liked ...

What the heck? I thought that you were writing a mystery novel! Not some thing like this! But, seeing as I just HATE mysteries... I liked this one though lots ...