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'he' is a mystery, I'll try improve it then. Thought so.

3. My Name is Gibson I am a guitar , electric at that. My arteries and veins are strings tuned for carrying my mellifluous blood that is a melody. Too ...

II. [s]Then [/s]this descent is what they meant by fall -- You don't have to put "Then", even if it's the second part. The poem sounds better without it. a ...

*clicks star*

Nope, I didn't....

...The french one doesn't require verse to be of equal length... Really, didn't know that. And once again people, please learn how to spell RHYTHM AND RIME correctly, it's driving ...

Thanks for reviews. You helped a lot...

I'm not sure I like the desert snake image... a snake is a particular image in occidental culture, it's evil, and the desert sounds dry and mean... Oh and this ...

I wouldn't want to be rude, but before discussing poetry, you might want to learn how to spell the word "rime" it's "rhythm" that has the Hs and Ys! I'm ...

Moving on: As the time passes by we’re becoming alone ‘cause I’ll here fly and she’ll be gone. • The underlined line is confusing, dear! It's hard to tell what ...

Right now, you're portraying Nature as something demonic, when with just a little tweaking, it could be Nature as a defender. ~Rosey This is just one "element" of nature, wilderness, ...

Thank you both for your comments. Thank you for posting. 3. I'm sorry if it sounded egotistic to you. I wasn't actually talking about myself. But I can see where ...

oh, idiotic boyfriend..are you pertaining to yourself? :lol: ...but i don't understand this: And I say she was just an idiotic boyfriend. how can you call a girl an "idiotic ...

You also said that the title to this was "Idiotic boyfriend" but why did you write about a "she?" Now I could understand if maybe you were feeling upset about ...

Phobias What do you do? Without question mark here When I smother you? Phobia , Phobia , Phobia ! This stuff here makes me think this belongs more in a ...