darkdove

This is a cool poem. Its like a haiku had a love child with a sonnet,lol. I totally get the imagery. this was a really cool poem. The part about ...

thanx for you comments.

The chapter is longer and another part cometh!!!!

Well if you would have read the first part of the story then it would have made more sense but thanks for your comments and read the begining.

For those who couldn't get and maybe if the first poam was read then it could be understandable. The narrator is talking about assisted suicide. HE helped him drown himself. ...

I like it It was cool and funny

Thank you for the critiques but thats not the end of the story I just didn't want to make ot too long.

I wrote more to it maybe the continuation will help you understand

I sort of hoped everyone would look at Christa more than her parents or at least sort of bring together whats going on or whats happened to her. I really ...

thank you for posting everyone.

I liked it! It had that subtle anger like the ones credit card companies send. This was awesome, keep it up. I wonder where you got the inspiration to write ...

Really i like it.

Thanks everyone for commenting. the rhyming was actually accidental didn't realize I was rhyming until after I proof read.

I like this poem. Its really good and I don't think it needs any work. Keep Writing!

I like the idea. But it does need some work, and I wish you focus more on the baby.