dancingclouds

thanks! I'll have a go at making it longer!:)

Heya, Its a really good poem, but the rhyming scheme is a little forced looking in some places. But I Like the whole image of the poem, as I said ...

Thanks, thats actually really helpful! I'l have a rethink about it! I'm a little rusty at the mo! thanks again!

Its a really clever poem, It puts into a something complicated to define. It also shows the clear hurt you're feeling,but not in a glaring way. I really enjoyed the ...

wow....this is really amazing....brilliant and vivid imagry ...wow!

hey kayyo! first of all I really do like you poem! I think that if you had the first few lines Quote: Falling down Further and further, Deeper and deeper. ...

wow this is brilliant!! "Keys like darkest midnight and brightest dawn" has to be my favorite line! keep writing!! heres a gold star! Roxy

i really liked this poem- theres alot of fealing in it...i even had to ring my friend and tell her about it and she loved it-and she can be a ...