Published February 27, 2012
I see him standing there
With his eyes of icy blue
Mocking me with his glare
Now all I do is stand and stare
With his eyes so brand new
I see him standing there
Jubilantly amazingly, how he dare
Oh ! His eyes which ever grew
Mocking me with his glare
Remembering what he must bare
While still watching his eyes so blue
I see him standing there
His eyes were ever so rare
And yet they still grew
Mocking me with his glare
I stared deeper into his glare
And wondered what to do
I see him standing there
Mocking me with a glare
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Heya, Its a really good poem, but the rhyming scheme is a little forced looking in some places. But I Like the whole image of the poem, as I said before its a good poem, but with a few tweeks, it could be a great poem