coryab222

Okay, so this is very good. Your characters are great, and all of your description and imagery has got me hooked. There is so much that I cannot possibly point ...

This is a great poem, but you really need to break up the stanzas in better places. Finish the thought before taking it to the next stanza. It will make ...

Eh... I can feel the emotion, but the structure of the poem made it rather unenjoyable to read. I prefer poems with proper stanzas and phrasing. There was virtually no ...

The beginning was very nice and descriptive. I did feel that you had some run on thoughts in the first few paragraphs. Consider breaking up your long descriptive to multiple, ...

That was nicely descriptive. Is this something you are planning on expanding on? As an excerpt it was pretty good, but as a reader I did not feel like the ...

This was really good. There was great expression of emotion. I loved the first and last stanzas - I felt like those showed me more of what the poem was ...

I thought this was nice and romantic. Though the content was good, I felt like the title did not fit the poem. The lines when you say "Like riding the ...

The theme of this was great. I felt the old man was a great character for this, but I would consider expanding more on who he really was. Was he ...

That was pretty good. I liked how it had a lot of emphasis on how the subject is feeling. The only problem was that it was so straight forward that ...

I'm not sure I really understood it. What you were trying to say was not all that clear. Was there someone to help her? Was there "someone" to help her? ...

It started out flowing very well, but I felt no connection with the musician or the person in love with the musician. There really weren't strong reasons for why the ...

You pulled that off very nicely. It was such a funny idea! I really did not understand what was going on until the very end, though. Perhaps you could weave ...

That was very nice. The connection between the character's heart and her fathers stained shirt was really a good choice. What would make it even better is if you could ...

I thought that was a great poem. I loved how you did not tell the reader exactly what was being written on the page or what sin was about to ...

That was such a fun poem! I actually really loved the randomness of it. It was a very original idea, and the topics within it were nicely chosen. Some where ...