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i think this is absolutely adorable! i would love to see this in a childrens book with a cute picture above it. =]

hmmm... im searching for a deeper meaning....... that was awesome. after reading it a second time i acctualy realized its like a romance, but more a poem of devotion. i ...

beautiful.

really nice job, i think i can speak for everyone else who has posted on this. =] uhm, i was just wondering..... is this supposed to be heaven or hell? ...

thanks kris =]

uhh question--- isn't what your describing supposed to be an enjoyable experience? ou make it sound like it was torture. maybe it was.

wow, nice. =] i like the other one better.

is this really jocelyn ressler?????? i am astounded. for anyone who doesn't know, this is coming from a tomboy. whooo i'm still in shock. joce you never cease to surprise ...

hah niceee... umm that was the most random thing ever, but hey, i guess thats just you... =D keep writing!

That's sweet. I really love how it makes the reader feel the excitement and fear... It makes it very alive. good job gabe!! i really love peices where it's from ...

Thanks everyone!!!

yeah, much like the picture i imagined. thanks. and thankyou everyone for posting, even if it was negitive i'm grateful for all the good suggestions. thanks! -M.J.-

how you use spacing and different placement works really well for this poem. I can almost imagine it being in a native american poem book with wispy drawings and such. ...

hah thanks mark =]

nice.... =] much like something i would write... check out my poems and reveiw them please!!! -M.J.-