chocolavahappiness

Hello! Really entertaining story :) But the problem is, I can't quite make out the 'fantasy' and 'horror' elements in this. To me it seems as if it would fit ...

ooookkkaaay :) I'm here for a review! First of all, this whole story had me going 'wtf' from beginning to the end. (In a nice way) I really liked the ...

Hello :) Lemme do a review. I liked the poem well enough, it actually began quite well. And I understand what you are trying to convey, that children lose their ...

Okay :) I'm gonna do a review here! First of all, I loved the theme. And the ending was... well damn, it was sad but good. The only thing I ...

Hello :) First off, I loved the idea, but I have some small issues with the story itself. I think you're not a native english speaker. You have made a ...

Hello :) I like the poem, and I LOVE the title. The 'invisible tears' part is beautiful. I couldn't exactly figure out why you began the poem with an 'and' ...

Hello :) This story... its beautiful. It spoke of life truthfully. And the language you used for conversations made it seem so natural as well. Shit happens in life :/ ...

Yo! I've got to tell you, I thought the title was hinting to some kind of a slapstick comedy about a perverted bench or something, so I was rather wary. ...

Hello! :D First let me tell you, I LOVED the title :) It literally compelled me to read this story. Overall, I loved the concept, and I loved your language ...

Um.... Okay :) I'm not a pro so don't take this seriously. But to be honest, I didn't much like the sentence constructions. It felt a bit awkward at places. ...

OMG OMG OMG This is awesome!!! Horror stories rarely scare me, but this one just creeped me out! I especially liked how you showed the Micky doppelganger. An exact negative ...

Nice idea, making a 'choose-your-own-path' story like this! Took me back to those times when I used to scare myself silly reading those 'give yourself goosebumps' books. Decent story, moral ...

Whoa! This is the second story I read (first being your awesome prologue) after becoming a member at YWS. I love you story idea, it has a LOT of potential!! ...