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Ooh, nice job on this one, Kaylyn :D very good. A few nitpicky things: "Yes, I'll take that one please," You need a comma after "one". She hoped it was ...

Hey KnightlyAngel09! I must admit when I saw the title for your poem I had a million ideas about how it could be written, but I didn't think of this ...

Hey scribblingquill! I'm a bit rusty at this reviewing business, so bear with me :wink: I really, really enjoyed this poem. Your imagery is great. I have to admit I ...

Hey! Congrats on another excellent chapter! Mr Stuart was a very insecure man, routing for his get-out-of-jail ticket with the use of Jared, one of the best lawyers in London, ...

This is really well written and descriptive, but it honestly doesn't move anywhere. I enjoyed reading it, but I don't walk away with anything I don't already know. I've been ...

Wow! Great! Your imagery is really strong, although I have to say that the dialogue doesn't support it. Maybe it's because there's too much of it, but I'm not getting ...

This is quite a strong piece, and I admire that, although you need to refrain from overdoing the strength of the language, especially about the laughing and "being lucky to ...

This is a cute little piece, although it does have some large holes in terms of setting and character. “What are you?” I asked, my voice feeling changed in the ...

For lyric poetry, I reccomend a little more descriptive language. water-smooth rock, did not feel herself lose me, feel me slipping out of her There are too many "feel"s. Yes, ...

Nice poem! A little bit confusing, because at some points it sounds as if you're talking to the radio and some points to a person (which you might want to ...

Beautiful poem! I love how you really get into deep description - awesomeness. I would probably suggest dividing it into stanzas, although that's not totally necessary. The imagery is fantastic ...

This was really good! It was captivating and interesting. A few flaws: OK, so it’s not a huge deal. But I had never been so hurt entirely on my own ...

Very good! I like the language you use, it's informal but not slang or anything. Thanks Bill, for helping to get rid of the evidence. Hehe, you gotta love sarcasm. ...

Not bad at all! A suggestion: as you wrote in rhyming line groups of 4, you might want to make them seperate stanzas? As if carved by a feather Feathers ...

Fabulous, fabulous, fabulous! You're a great poet, you know that? Drifting Down, Floating. Flying The full stop after "Floating" is a bit awkward with the "Flying" straight after. I think ...