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My dad is over there right now and I honestly don't know why either. From what I've heard the battle is between us and the Iraqis, but I've also heard ...

I'm sorry to say that I don't have any critiques. Or at least none that haven't been found already. Buuut, I've been checking back here everyday to see if you've ...

See see see! I told you I would get to it today! I win. Or actually you do... hmmm... well anywho here goes! Chapter 5: A pleasant reunion Alex and ...

And lo, I have arrived. Chapter 4: Running form danger with my love form=from... haha Alex spun the steering wheel to the left and 1. held the brake. The truck ...

HA!!! I didn't forget this time! So there. The world’s militaries are competing for what little recourses are still usable to the human population. The United States’ 1. recourses have ...

Haha, this is very funny. It reminds me of a couple of my friends, who would be yelling at me like this. I think the dialogue is well done, but ...

Here I go! Rather late I might add... BUT I'm here now. hoo-ray. The clouds loomed 1. overhead seemingly defeated. The 2. boy had survived the onslaught of the F5 ...

I kind of liked this poem, it's thought provocative. It definitely gives off a nice mood, though as Muteman says it does need something to tie it to the ground. ...

As promised :wink: Chapter 1: A feeling of Despair “This is an emergency broadcast bulletin!” The automated system yelped as the speaker was whipped away by the two hundred plus ...

I promised, so here I am! I may not be able to get to the others today, sorry. I have a busy schedule (for once). I will crit them all ...

Interesting, slightly cliche' but hey humans overall are cliche' aren't they? Oh, and the title? I think you mean 'Meaningless Words'. I told you that I loved you And you ...

This was impressive! The first stanza really captures the reader's attention, and I think gossamer worked fine actually. The thing that bothered me is that in the first stanza, the ...

Great analogy and like lunabuna said, it was really amazing. It's a nice break from the cliche' poems that seem to be everywhere, which makes it eyecatching. The only thing ...

I don't have time for an in-depth critique, sorry! But I can offer some advice: 1)Show, don't tell: Instead of saying Lexy loved soccer, she wore blablabla... Show us! If ...

Hello! My comments are in bold! Then I'll get to the nice part where I compliment you. Deep in the slums of Paris, an unruly boy eyed a half-concealed wallet ...