Published May 8, 2008
I told you that I loved you
And you said "I love you too
But lets keep this to ourselves,
A secret between me and you.
I kept my promise
And told no-one
But you told me lies
And I fell for them.
You told me you loved me
But you never let it show.
You pushed me aside
When I needed you most.
Your stupid pride
Blinds you from whats real.
You walk on by
With no idea how to feel.
I thought I loved you
But now I know the truth.
Let me tell you something hunny
I am so over you!
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That's a good poem. I've written something like that to get over a crush too, you're not alone on that one.
I like the last two lines:
It fits into the poem, but it also is something that you would hear more often in just plain conversation. That is, if the conversation was with that person. Those lines gave your poem a nice finish. Good work.
Interesting, slightly cliche' but hey humans overall are cliche' aren't they? Oh, and the title? I think you mean 'Meaningless Words'.
Nice job! I hope everything works out for you...
I hate liers!
(or atleast the first part.)
I have to say no spelling mistakes, no punctuation misstakes.
Over all a witty post, if you were telling that to your crush I would so be laughing on the floor right now.
He'd proble go.