carmenbluestar

why thank you!!

aww thank you

Nothing to review on, only high praise. Poems that are so strong are amazing to come by. Amazing job, lovely poem, fantastic feeling and pacing, good use of vocabulary and ...

Amazing there is so much here and yet it's so short, please keep up the good work :) This is proof that there isn't a need for many words in ...

So much emotion and intensity great job!

I agree with the previous review this is a good piece but there is some cleaning up to be done. I feel as though a few of your sentences do ...

it speaks to me (:

Very good very interesting I like how you've written it very true to the way someone would speak in this condition (I guess you'd call that being true to character) ...

I agree what everyone is saying. You definitely know what you're doing, there are a few little bits are kinda awkward to read, especially because the majority is relatively smooth. ...

thanks for the advice the grammar comes from attempting to multitask so I'll definitely be doing a few reviews