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np and very cool

this is funny,

great job lindz keep it up

thank.

thank you. and yes it is long and I'm planning to just post one chapter at a time. and I did change the names throughout the story and I knew ...

thx you and yes ill definitely see what you mean about paragraphs and ill change them in my next edit this story I started last year as a writing assignment ...

ill try to make changes. and thx for great review

ok. but the info i found on internet told me about Ancient Egyptian but it is mostly wrong but this article is whatever people make of it

thx for great review and ill make the changes soon also this was a English class essay.

thx for great review and ill do my best to change the text. also i got a A on this essay in my English class

good story but i say you need to put this in the short poem category also i love the emotions you put into the poem. Over all very good job

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good story but i say you need to put this in the short poem category also i love the emotions you put into the poem. Over all very good job

by the way this story is based of two defrent fanfiction "black bullet" and "RWBY"

thanks ill try my best to fix some suff. I thoght no one would would see the star war name ventres.

hope you enjoy this new story