captain.classy

I agree with Pink that this is predictable. I knew exactly what was going to happen an entire chapter before! I really hope a huge twist is coming! :)

I loved this :) Especially your poem!! ~Classy

No problem ;) Happy to help! PM me if you would like any more reviews. I would like to read some of your other works!

Alright, I get what your saying about the whispering thing. I will most definitely look for it :)

I actually really liked this. I really like the way you write. Every sentence seemed to flow nicely, and I think you described everything in full, with no confusion. ~Classy

oh.my.goodness.

I really liked it! It was so much better than the last section, I was very happy! ~Classy

Okay, well just to be brief, I was bored when reading this! I suggest you run through it and add more symbolic imagery, and maybe change the title. It's not ...

I suggest you expand, since this really didn't have a plot, or really even an ending. yet.

Ha, I am glad you went back to fix it. Editing only takes a second! ~Classy

Woah! I honestly wrote a story that is so similar to this! Yours is better, though. ha! ~Classy

Hiya! I really liked the part when jack told Jane where he was taking her. It gave me tingles! But, I am confused about why Jane would go into the ...

Okay, well this is interesting. I think i like where you are going with this, but one cant be too sure. I am excited for the next chapter! ~Classy

Hmm, how you created a mystery about Aiden makes me want to read, I will give you that. I say just try it! and post it, and I will go ...

I liked this, good job. I have no corrections, ha ha ~Classy