captain.classy

Oof! Can you say proofread?! Here I go... I write for the same reason I breath . If I didn't , I would die . Without words to express myself ...

I would consider making your lines all one equal length. When you make a list, the entire bunch could be made into two equal lines. I just think it would ...

Hiya! Sorry for all the nitpicks! Tired of being pushed down the frigid hallways in a beaten-up weal-chair, tired of being force-fed baby food, tired of having preppy nurses a ...

Hiya again! You did better with this part, as far as your poor grammar goes, haha! This was the only part i found confusing: But deep inside me, I felt ...

Hiya! I think i noticed some errors, so i will try to help ;) Our school’s annual function practice had begun. But I wasn’t participating. Studious children like me do ...

This is good, but I suggest some work. I find this a little cliche, and your words and lines have all been used! Maybe you could form more poetic, metaphoric ...

Yes! I loved this. I have never read in this section before, but I am glad I did ;) Your description of his bullet-clad face was beautiful. ha ha, wrong ...

Mkay, well you poem flows nice, but i have to say i lost interest by how many times you repeated the word 'hand.' you repeating the same words sort of ...

okay, okay. Your story seems interesting, but i suggest some serious work on this chapter. You jump around so much, i don't know where you are going! You need to ...

Ello! I saw no one had commented, and i was like, hey! I have some time. I like the way you wrote this. The way the narrator is speaking is ...

I love this poem! It was all too realistic. ha ha I have to say, though, that I do not like the title very well. I don't think it corresponds ...

Okay, well you jump around different views, you should work on that. i don't have time to do a full analysis, and i apologise for that. This story is intriguing ...

Hiaya! I'm classy. Your story definitely brought me in. I feel like i am already in love with Andrews character! I hope he is good, ha ha Good job on ...

Whoa, okay I just spend the past few days reading all these, and I don't regret it at all! I mean some parts were confusing, yes, but you explained them ...

Quick review! Okay: "with-out any fuss" Just 'without' please. I think you should put a period at the end of this, too. "I thought it was alriight" you dont need ...