Published October 25, 2009
Well this is called a Shakespearian Sonnet and its suppose to express emotions. So I hope you all like it. 
You came into my life
with-out any fuss
I thought it was alriight
Until you made me cuss
You drove me crazy
to the end of the road
I thought you were my baby
I gave you my soul
I loved you; I gave it my all
I saw you cheat
I just wanted to fall
in my knees,I feel weak
Just gonna walk away
Thats all I have to say!
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This was a very good poem that captures many feelings. The emotions were good, you just need to check your spelling and punctuation. I especially like the part about being driven to the end of the road, like "This is is, we're done". I also like the line, "Given you my soul". It really describes how serious the relationship is, and how hard it would be to end it, and just leave. Nice work!
~Rocking Writer~
This kind of reminded me of the famous 'Ten Things I Hate about You' poem. Short and sweet.
It's the kind of poem where a lot of people, even if they haven't been through that situation, find they can empathize.
I'm no poems expert so i can only really comment on what it makes me think and feel.
I liked it.
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"with-out any fuss" Just 'without' please. I think you should put a period at the end of this, too.
"I thought it was alriight" you dont need that extra i in 'alright'.
"Until you made me cuss" I dont like the word 'cuss' but that may just be me; not very poetic. Also a period at the end of this sentence.
"I thought you were my baby" Semicolon at the end of this
"I gave you my soul" period at the end of this
"I loved you; i gave it my all" Period after 'i gave it my all'
"I saw you cheat" comma after this line
"I just wanted to fall" comma after fall
"In my knees, I feel weak" period after this line
"Just gonna walk away" either period or semicolon please
"Thats all i have to say!" i would take away the '!'. Your poem is dramatic, i don't think it should end like that. Also, 'thats' should be written like: 'That's'
Overall: I was okay! You need to work on punctuation.
bye
~Classy