captain.classy

But, the tears I shed, They are for you, The 'they' should not be capitilized. I really liked this, actually. I mean, sure the subject of love is a little ...

This is something more of a basis for a work much bigger. I think you can take this and expand on it! I want more of a story. Why doesn't, ...

The sun is setting, setting The summer sun is setting and A harvest moon, He saw a harvest moon, So I don't like how you repeated these things here. It ...

While she is so, I have not health this was the only part I found awkward. The last part, after the comma, well, to me, it just doesn't make sense. ...

It was raining, the day she came. Delete the comma. the water dripped down her red mask, down the forehead, down the brow and to the eye so it was ...

Yeah, so Aqua already correction (I didn't look what she said) but I have my own opinions and stuff to add! :) Sure, I wasn’t the brightest crayon in the ...

I wish I were little lil! When I read this, I got tingles. If my future self were to send me a letter like this, I would believe everything is ...

And for the ones, Who toss the word around, They hide their scars with shame, Their lives become unwound. So... you are explaining two words in your poem: Love and ...

I seriously think this is my favorite one of yours. Ever. Okay, so your poem left me wondering one thing, and I'm not sure if it is the thing you ...

You already have content-comments so I am going to express my nit-pickiness. Blahh it's still their Still 'there' but the words wont come out words won't but no ones their ...

To whom she'd never say no. This line didn't flow very well with the rest of them poem, at least to me. I would suggest shortening it. I am a ...

Because I do not how to do anything else because I do not 'know' how to do anything else. Do you mean that? hehe So, I think this poem is ...

So short! A man in uniform answered the door and led us into the parlor. Uniform, to me, sounds like a man dressed in a Navy, Marines, Army uniform, not, ...

Foreeeest. Okay, now that that's over... I only spotted a few things, but that's because I wasn't really looking. ;) Why, did me, being the oldest be the homely one? ...

Pecan! You are a lovely follower on my story, I thought I should start to repay you. (plus you asked on chat) blooming with intensity. This line doesn't really fit ...