captain.classy

Classy here! The only thing I'm afraid of is that if you're using these characters for the rest of the story, then you have started the action too early. The ...

Sounds cute, and promising! The number one thing I would like you to focus on is your tense. This story seems to be written in mostly past tense, but in ...

I'm heeere! Although this was very short, I felt like I was reading on forever. I can't tell if it is a good thing or a bad thing yet. At ...

Haha, that's funny because when I first read it I was like "is that how you spell Attila the Hun? I really like it, and really have nothing bad to ...

Hey! I felt bad seeing that you haven't received any criticism yet, and thought I would drop in! :P The town that they both lived in was small and dusty. ...

Chapter 1 review: Her ash-blonde hair was in perfect place, softly falling on her shoulders, her emerald green eyes, was filling with tears. Too much. I have been told I ...

I love this. This is a perfect example of 'show not tell.' You showed it to me. Instead of telling me you love this creature (a dog, is it?) you ...

This is very different... not bad... just different. I'd like to say I know what's going on, but I have no clue. Is the main character actually a jaguar? Where ...

I am loving this story more and more! I am dissapointed that this was so short, though. It was not satisfying! Next time, post a longer chapter. That was a ...

Aw, this touched my heart! I love reading pieces like this! Unknown to her, unknown to anyone actually, he loved her. Yes, he loved her with all his heart. He ...

Hiya, here I am again! Hope you don't mind another review. Quotes I gaze at the boy who looks to be four years older than me. Alright, lets talk about ...

Hiya! Classy here for a review. So I tried to understand this, but I am very confused. I just don't get the transition between the boy dying, and then him ...

I really like this, and enjoyed reading it. “I don’t think we’re going to work out.” This was the only thing I didn't like. It's odd, and I feel like ...

Haha! Goodness, I love this story so much. Your dialogue is so realistic, with the swearing and the accents, nice job on that. Now, I know you can't do much ...

I've already read this, so I really have nothing to say. I think you need more explanation of Tristan and her relationship. I'm still not sure why he is so ...