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--> Hello, Jojo! This is a great prologue! :) Like it! I dunno, I just couldn't give you a feedback about grammars etc because I was just a writer nazi- ...

Please tell me the meaning you get, and if you know that feeling. I really can't describe it and all my life I've wondered if other people know that feeling. ...

--> hi! :3 --> since the others have given out the corrections already, all that I could suggest is try to let the words rhyme with each other.. :3 well, ...

+ Whoa, great poem. It was truly dramatic in a sense that it gives me the concept that the guy /speaker of the poem was suiciding. :] + Well, I ...

--> hi, Perse!! :) (can I call you Perse, instead?) --> wow, this is a very neat poem with a good format too. :] --> nothing else to say, I ...

+ hello, jas! I think this is my second comment to your works. :3 + first of all, I don't care about the rhythm, poem structure, syllable count, etc. It's ...

+ You know, Upile, you captured what I feel about my home. My parents told me that we would leave this house that I treated as my home when I ...

--> About the concept, I LIKE it! haha! It must be kind of brutal but I was totally fascinated with that type of story/essay/novel (yeah, that's the creepy side of ...

---> I agree about what your poem's message is: journal is our amigo. ---> I don't post long messages and so I'll say that I really like this one! :) ...

+ hello! welcome to YWS too! :] haha! + Hey, you've got a good poem/lullaby there, although what I want right now is to hear the tune :] + I ...

With dark wings of a presise art, --> I think this should be, "With dark wings of precise art," They cast a glowing light on the too small walls --> ...

walls the seemed so overbearing then --> this might ought to be.. "walls that seemed so overbearing the.." --> about the poem, I like the concept that this poems sent ...

--> I'm a GOOFY GOOBER!! hahaha! (ROCK!) LOL!! --> you know, I'm a Spongebob fan so when I read the title, you already drew me in and I read this ...

--> great horror-like poem, :3 --> The words are too deep but I don't care about that so much... c: haha! --> Sorry if I got no corrections, etc. :D ...

---> did you know how freakin' awesome this poem is?? It's so sad but so good, such a beauty, I love the way that you expressed sad emotions here even ...