My Home

by Upile

Published March 2, 2011

In your arms
Big and strong
I find solace
Yes in your
Masculine embrace
Right in the comfort
Of your firm chest.

It’s your warm touch
As you hold me close,
In this I find
My peace of mind
Where pleasure
Meets the end of time.

When all is wrong
And there’s no sense
In this cold world
I know sorrow will
Cease to exist
Once I’m safely
Tucked in my place
Of bliss,
Caved in sweet euphoria.

Nostalgia when you are away
Gets the very best of me
Reminiscing of who I’m missing
Satisfied only when you’re in my vision
And
I’m back where I belong
In your arms big and strong.

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Upile
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Upile commented Comment · Mar 4, 2011

Hey all,
You are truly awesome!! Thanks for the reviews. I totally love how this poem got such good feed-back. @ Cali poetry can remind you of anything, its some interesting how poems speak to people differently, I'm so happy that it touched you in that way. Good luck with the move. @ LittlePetRock, I love your name for starters!!Thanks for pointing out the mistakes, I'll sort that out.:). @ Giselle and Mikko gracias!!!:)

cali34rniasummer wrote a review Review · Mar 4, 2011

+ You know, Upile, you captured what I feel about my home. My parents told me that we would leave this house that I treated as my home when I graduated high school next month and how sad was that. :[ Although you were talking a person in this poem, this is what I still felt about our home :3

+ I love this poem. What more can I say?

love,
Cs

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LittlePetRock
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LittlePetRock wrote a review Review · Mar 4, 2011

Awwww! Sounds like you've got the love bug, how wonderful it is, yes? :)

In your arms
Big and strong
I find solace. Should put a period there, in my opinion.
Yes in your
Masculine embrace
Right in the comfort
Of your firm chest. 'chest.' Isn't very flowy with this stanza.

It’s your warm touch
As you hold me close,
In this I find
My peace of mind
Where pleasure
Meets the end of time. MY FAVOURITE PART!!

When all is wrong
And there’s no sense
In this cold world
I know sorrow will
Cease to exist. Another period. :P
Once I’m safely
Tucked in my place
Of bliss,
Caved in sweet euphoria. Aww!!

Nostalgia when you are away
Gets the very best of me
Reminiscing of who I’m missing
Happens to me too. :)
Satisfied only when you’re in my vision
And
I’m back where I belong
In your arms big and strong. Wonderful ending!


This is fantastic. I love it!
Keep writing!

--LPR

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Giselle97
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Giselle97 commented Comment · Mar 2, 2011

I Love your poem and how you feel when you with that special person.

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Mikko
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Mikko wrote a review Review · Mar 2, 2011

Wow! I see someone's inspired today...unlike me.
Anyway, yes, the poem is sweet. I like the line:

Reminiscing of who I’m missing

because of the rhyme in one line and I especially like the very last line since it takes the reader back to the first image they have in their head. It's beautiful.



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