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This speaks to me. I get where you're coming from; I'm sorry you had to have the inspiration. Umm... In the first bit: In a swirl of crispy black and ...

Hi! I have not read something quite like this before. Very intriguing, writing the point of view from a sword. Very interesting way to grab a reader's attention. I respectfully ...

Okay, I picked this up because it didn't have any reviews. {I know, it's such a bad reason!} *Hides face in shame* But this already intrigues me, and I haven't ...

Okay, I don't have much time, but let me see if I can get what I see. I'm going to do this in a strange way. I'm going to note ...

I am going to try a different style of review for you. I'm going to go through and fix as I read the first time, then reread to catch what ...

I am a big fan of intricate horror, so I officially love you, by the way. I am all about some awesomely awesome description and transformational characters, so this fits ...

Okay. I have to applaud you for being willing to touch religion. And the disasters, yeah, way braver than me, chica! (chico, chick, dude, dudette? I don't know how to ...

I have to admire you. I am not willing to even touch angels. ... ... At least I think he was an angel. And I'm going to be really disappointed ...

-Apostrophes[*](starlinks) -Very vague[*](princess {Elinor Brynn(she can't have Sleeping Beauty as a profile picture and not be called princess!)*pouts in corner*)} ) -Punctuation[ ]...< It's not chec

I like the message this poem brings across, but I am going to focus on, mostly, mechanics. You need to go back and put in punctuation. I do realize that, ...

You break the lines up without any punctuation a lot. Even if it doesn't make grammatical sense, when you write poetry, it's commonly accepted to put some form of punctuation ...

I find it interesting that you have a character that is extremely careful with his words for a reason that isn't a speech impediment. This is really short for a ...

I'm just going to jump in here. I like that you manage to add description without stifling the reader with it. Some nitpicky things: You wrote: "Her father leaned towards ...

Wow. How ambiguous. That's impressively complicated. Able to entrance readers while leaving them with no facts to work with at all. But, if you're not coming back to this, there ...

Why did the white tree Stop and talk to me(question mark) Why did the red rose Fly away(comma) Leaving me behind With nothing to say(question mark) Why did the wind ...