briggsy1996

Hi there, First off, I love your rhyming scheme- it just flows so nicely, and there weren't any parts where it sounded off or compromised, which is awesome. Anyway, onto ...

Hi there! This poem both intrigued and confused me... but in a good way! It has an element of mystery to it, because I'm not entirely sure what is going ...

Hi there! From the first section about the dream, up until the very end, I was captivated. Now I want more! My mind has wandered to the point of what ...

Hi there! I see you have the start of what I think could be a potentially brilliant novel. I'll get the nitpicks out of the way first. They're mostly mechanical; ...

Hi there! I'll start with the nitpicks to get them out of the way: millions of wings patter as the butterflies fly off into the distance. - I love the ...

Hi there! I see you're new to YWS, so welcome :) Onto your poem, I thought that you brought your thoughts across very clearly. It was easy to understand where ...

Hi there! The title drew me in also, and as I read I wondered how you could have .5 of a word- then the ending came and I smiled. That ...

Hi again! Is this the end? It seems like it to me, and if it is, I must say that it is a very powerful way to end things. wow. ...

Hi there Oh wow, I am only on the second chapter and I am already hooked to this story! The imagery and tone is perfect and you seem to have ...

Hi there! First off, I agree with Idraax that this could be expanded more. I also genuinely liked this but I feel like it lacked a few things. Detail is ...

Hi there! I've read other poems that you've written and I must say that even though a lot are short, they are excellent! This one especially, I could relate to- ...

Hi there! I'm not a huge poetry reader, but I personally have never read anything like this! Onto the poem: I thought it was brilliant! A lot of the time ...

Hi there! I'll get to my overall thoughts in a moment. First I'll go through and highlight errors: Mindy Kay was my best friend or so I thought. I watch ...

Hi there, I see you're new, so welcome :) Ok, so on to your story- wow. Like, wow, this is really raw and solid. Gruesome throughout, for sure, but overall ...

Hi there, To begin, I generally liked this. It was a little hard to follow at certain points, but overall it wasn't bad and I see a lot of potential ...