break~my~heart

wow, this. is. good. I love the first stanza, especially. It's beautiful, your words. I like the third stanza too, the time and the clock. I don't really have anything ...

aah, just like your last poem (that I just finished reviewing) you did not disappoint me :) This one was beautiful also. Unlike the last one however, you have no ...

oh my gosh, this is beautiful!! I love it! It paints a perfect picture. I can see him just sitting there strumming aahh haha anyways, you work well with emotions ...

Uncertainty I d on't know if you're true ; I don't want to cry . I'm not sure I am too, but I'd love to try . Try what? To ...

hi there! ash here :) comments are in bold below. However there aren't but a few, since I have almost nothing to critique with this wonderful piece. My heart is ...

ello there! ash here :) so, on to your review, I liked this idea behind the poem. It was refreshing and it actually made the reader think, unlike so many ...

wow, this poem is great! It really is quite refreshing. It's so different, and definitely well written :) I love how it turns out that you are actually the one ...

h, I'm ash :) corrections or ideas will be in bold :) explanation. I wrote. So can't firgure out the rhythm? Look how in every other line the last word ...

hi, I'm ash, and I thought I'd drop in and review ;) I put corrections or ideas in bold beside your poem :D Dungeons Dungeons are places No comma (w) ...

oh my god, I love this. It actually left me speechless. Oh, my god. It's so mysterious and beautiful. and dark hehe well, anyways, I don't have much to add ...

Hello there! Ash here to crit :D Hmm, let's see, first off, I liked this. It was simple, and imaginative. You describe boredom..well... beautifully. haha I never thought I'd be ...

Honestly, dooeywhateveryournameis up there! How can you be so harsh? I'm sure she either didn't know, or will get to it as soon as she can. Geez, just massacre her, ...

I really liked this! I think it gets your feelings across really well, and it flows nicely. You could so make this into a song! I would listen to it ...

Hi there, angles-symphony! ash here to crit since my points have dipped dangerously low. And I have no idea why either! I had like 600 something and then poof! gone! ...

this is a poem dedicated to a recent crush of mine, after i wrote it i was able to understand more of how i felt. I see your face now ...