berrylique

the title intrigued me to read this... and i thought it is pretty good. i would like to hear the tune :)

erm, i am not really sure if this is long enough to be a song. but the lyrics was ok, i think.

although it's a short chapter, it's nice. i spotted a lot of mistakes, which i think Syddles had already pointed them out. good work. :D

pretty ok, except for some spelling mistakes. also, the title was mispelt, giving others a bad impression.

thanks kitty, misty and chocoholic for the crtique and comments, they are greatly appreciated. :D and chocoholic, i didn't want to elaborate on the baby's illness as I didn't want ...

it's very beautiful and cute(: you have a nice theme going. perharps a better rhyme? it would have a better flow(although the flow here is good). nice one.

i thought it was lovely(: it's definitely not lame. it was described very beautifully and it's also very simple. maybe you can describe more, but keep it as beautiful as ...

it's fabulous. easy to read and very fluent. very descriptive too. a beautifully written piece.

the notes contained instructions from Gerry to Holly, and they really helped her to move on with her life. one of the notes instructed Holly to throw Gerry's items and ...

it's a great story, and you're a good writer. :D

i feel that it should be under horror fiction and not romantic fiction. anyway, the story is great. there are some grammactical errors. i hope you update more on this ...

I think Harry Potter. I just love JKR's style of writing and her originality and creativity! I didn't really understand Lord of the Rings.

i think it was good. and yeah, there should be more background and character information. i can't wait to read the whole story :) keep up the great work!

It's a nice little tale. By the way, I like singing too :) , and i am also in the school choir. But my choir was OK, the students sang ...