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Hey, urso major :) nice to meet you. I don't really do nit picky or grammar reviews. Mainly because I am horrible at grammar lol but I'll try my best ...

I found this quite interesting but I sort of feel like you revealed an awful lot in the prologue. However I don't know how your going to continue this story, ...

Hey Lucy I'm Becki, nice to meet you :) I liked the idea behind this prologue. That a boy is taken away from his parents at an early age and ...

I quite enjoyed this actually. I had the sense that you the author knew a lot more about the world and the characters than I the reader did. I like ...

Hello yuki-chanx welcome to YWS :) I'm not really sure what this is supposed to be? Is it a prologue to a longer story? It is very short. I thought ...

Well I can't say anything about grammar because I am useless at it lol but I'll try and suggest a few other things. I quite like your writing style, at ...

Hey Texan Writer Sorry it took me so long to review. I have had a gazillion hand ins at university. But now I have a week off yipee! lol Well ...

Hey flytodreams. I assume you meant you wanted me to review this new prologue because it is the only other one in your portfolio and it says Icy paths on ...

Hey Texan Writer :) This was much better! I liked how the guards were introduced. It wasn't like ta-da guards! You got more of a sense of who they are ...

Hello Rosy! Thought I would have a look at some of your work, seen as you have been helping me out so much :) I LOVE christmas. As you know ...

Hey TexanWriter, my name is becki. I am sorry but I can't help you much with grammar. I am terrible at it and that is why I am on here, ...

I felt quite confused reading this. I think it may be to do with the grammar, you use words in the wrong tense in some cases - 'Normally I would ...

I think generally it's quite good, I already feel quite worried about Renee even though the extract was quite short. Other reviewers may have pointed this out already but it ...

This was an interesting prologue it reminded me a lot of Harry Potter but maybe that is because I have just started re-reading the Harry Potter books. When I started ...

Hehe I came to bookmark this and then saw how short it was so I read it! :) I kind of like how you write it is a very different ...