I still wasn’t sure what to feel, rejoiced? relieved? I sat silently while I watched Nathan take the body out back. To bury him. I wondered if the boy had had a family, he barely passed for seventeen. Headlines in news programs flashed in my head before I could deny them entry. I shook my head in the hopes that they would leak away.
The dewy grass glistened with the crystal water drops in the sunset. I stroked the white marble deftly and sighed to myself. I bent down to lay the roses on the stone gently. I ran my fingers along the inscription. HERE LIES CADENCE AND CALEB WALKER.LOVING MOTHER AND FATHER.DIED SEPTEMBER 17th 2013.THEY WILL ALWAYS BE REMEMBERED.
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Hello yuki-chanx welcome to YWS
I'm not really sure what this is supposed to be? Is it a prologue to a longer story? It is very short.
I thought it was well written you describe things quite well but just as I was getting into the story, it ended lol I would like to have more of this story, just so I can get into the flow. It is a bit short to review lol
Good start to a story though just continue it more please!