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Beautiful!

Thanks!

After thinking about it, how do you feel about cutting the first line?

I love the idea of having two poems in one.

I love how you anthropomorphize the machine and use such beautiful language!

This is amazing.

Thanks so much for your helpful and constructive comments, Hannah! I'm so glad to hear how the specific things in the piece work/don't work. I'm going to ruminate on your ...

I think I figured it out (basically just deleted the "i wants" and adjusted the grammar: when doing nothing is doing everything on a languid sunday morning with you sounds ...

I'm really feeling so good right now. I'm putting my MFA dreams on hold for now, but I want to keep working on my craft, and making things that give ...

I really appreciate it! :)

Thank you so much!

I'm thinking of changing the first line to "on a languid sunday morning with you" and am hoping the doing nothing is doing everything will suffice as existing in the ...

Hi Ty! Thank you for your helpful and validating review. All the issues you brought up were things I was wondering myself and I'm glad you told me so that ...

Thanks for the really helpful feedback. Was exactly what I needed to hear!