beccalicious94

They are all amazing pieces! If I had to guess which one you submitted I would probably say either number 2 or 4. I'm writing a few college essays myself, ...

Very cute poem! I think the message is great as well. The one thing that bugged me was the rhyme scheme. It was annoying to get through because some parts ...

Little comments: was a boy should have a period after it, thus beginning Her boy. It was a well written piece I will say that. If I may, I think ...

I really loved this piece. Comments: there were some awkward phrases like your fictional sport--cute but kind of out of place. Why does "The ground" get its own line twice? ...

Really good poem. The only thing to work on is maybe the grammar a bit, for instance When we just be who we are? Why should we be treated differently, ...

Great article! I feel your vivid descriptions of the current economic situation. The only grammar issue I could find was "not employees, employers NOR their families." Your personal anecdote was ...

I thought this was a great poem! I love the emotion conveyed throughout and the use of questions. We have similiar writing styles, so I found this piece particularly interesting. ...

Silliness :D You used to take my covers, You used to hog my bed. You used to steal my pillow, Without leaving me a thread. You used to snore in ...

I loved this poem! I thought it flowed smoothly for the most part, and I like the analogies you use. The rhyme scheme worked for you wholelistically but it was ...

So I thought these lyrcis we're really great, and you should never ever throw things out!!! The only nitpicky grammar comment I have is the last line instead of "fell" ...

How the roses smell so sweet, And their thorns a warning sign, A signal we all should heed, Before we cross that line. - For the rose itself is not ...

I am a fish. Small and insignificant. I live in this pond, nay this ocean. I am pale blue with grey stripes. I am part of school, but yet no ...

Paranoia grips my churning mind, As sleep comes not to me. I shift my positions while upon my bed, To seek the gated dream. - Relentless attempts at a perfect ...

Bawdy Lover BY Adrian Touch me on my thigh, please. Don’t hesitate and resist this pleasure zone. Caress the smooth and curvy flesh, and leave no spot undiscovered. Is it ...

His black hair falls over black eyes. A glance a way I dare fills my stomach with butterflys. I watch him from afar I keep my feelings at bay. On ...