barefootrunner

Here to review! Oh, this is fascinating! The prologue itself was good enough, but the opening section was very static and descriptive. It might have been better if you kept ...

Hi there! This piece certainly succeeded in being full of suspense. Let's just have a look at it in detail: Spelling and Grammar: Firstly, the title is missing an apostrophe ...

Hi there! Reviewing your work as requested! It was hard reading, but interesting. It needs some rounding, though. Spelling and grammar: This aspect needs some work. Firstly, you have a ...

Hi there! Spelling and grammar (and other nitpicks): This piece doesn't really need this, and most of the samples are merely suggestions for improvement, but I am horrible, and I ...

Hi there RenGrey! Here to review your piece! Okay, firstly, this is not strictly correct script style. You should have something like this: [Green lighting] Ms. Elizabeth: [angrily] Where is ...

Hi there! Okay, to review. This was very fun reading! I really like this! A few more directions for actions on the stage would be good, to vary the levels ...

Okay, review time! Spelling and grammar: This mistake: 'thier' should be 'their'. A simple typo. 'Nevermind' is two words. You left out the last dot on your ellipses every time ...

Hi there, CrossingFlower! First, spelling and grammar: You wrote "then" instead of "than", and Bahamas does not need an apostrophe, but that is all. Well done! Poeticism: Your use of ...

Hi there! Here to review! I was rather puzzled by your work— Firstly, the spelling and grammar: Bravo! Very good. I could find nothing wrong. Poeticism: Hmmm. There was really ...

Okay. Remember my last reviews? This is a repetition of those, but I'll go ahead and extract a few more pieces for your perusal. Again, tense mistakes. We also discovered ...

Today, a much quicker review than my last. The previous points still apply. Your spelling and grammar is great. Absolutely beautiful built-in red marker you have there—you can be proud ...

Greetings, artemisathena! Wonderful, absorbing text. I really enjoyed reading it. My tips for you in order of importance: #1 Keep it as short as possible. #2 Don't talk down to ...

Hey, Forestqueen! A quick review for you. I really like this poem, but I have some short critiques to make. The imagery is beautiful, yet not superfluous. The lineation is ...

Hi, misstoria! Let's start with spelling and grammar: Not much to say, except for the ninth line—the it's should be its. The first line, yes, it is poetic licence, but ...

Hi there, Hazzer! Welcome to YWS! I am sure that you will enjoy yourself immensely here. You have a very accomplished writing style! Here is all the spelling and grammar ...