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Re: Empty Mind
I just wrote a poem somewhat about writer's block as well. I was a bit concerned about the inconsistency of the rhyme scheme, but reading it a second time, I ...
Apr 4, 2011 -
Re: The changes within
I like that this poem has some depth in it, some sort of social relevance if I'm reading it right? - a good break from all the love poetry. I ...
Apr 4, 2011 -
Re: Nothing Rhymes With Purple
What can i say? I love rhyme especially when it has some humor in it. I would just have to suggest that you keep a consistent meter scheme so that ...
Feb 9, 2011 -
Re: First Love
I feel your sentiments, dear! It's a common occurrence for friends to get attracted to one another. I guess a lot of people can relate to this. Perhaps you can ...
Oct 18, 2009 -
Re: I've Been There Before
I like the structure and the consistency of rhyme but you might want to work on the flow of rhythm. Try counting syllables or perhaps read it out loud; that ...
Oct 18, 2009 -
Re: It Ends Tonight
I got intrigued to read this poem initially because of the title. I was prepared to comment that you change it because it's the title of a mainstream song. But ...
Oct 18, 2009 -
Re: Alone
Structure-wise, not typical, so I like it. The concept was vague, but had a lot of emotion as well. Punctuation marks could help though; they'll make statements stand out more. ...
Sep 7, 2009 -
Re: The Lily
Overall, nice job! Your topic is quite unique. It's a good break from all the love poems, so I really appreciate this one. :) But of course, I have some ...
Sep 1, 2009 -
Re: Dancers
just BEAUTIFUL! :D sorry, i can't find anything to criticize... love yah bf! :D
Aug 15, 2009 -
Re: The Neverending Love Song
A friend (KnightleyAngel) told me to read this one. Glad she did, cause i fell in LOVE with it! :P I keep reading it over and over again. This one ...
Aug 5, 2009 -
Re: A Splendid Agony
Another nice one dear, you deserve this: *claps*! I love the imagery, that it almost amused me at first. I had no idea where it would lead to. The twist ...
Aug 5, 2009 -
Re: This Pen is Retired, II
Love it bf! :D I'm trying out for the Heights. I'm making it a mission to print your works there! They're all so awesome! :D I love that it's now ...
Jul 8, 2009 -
Re: Funky Rhyme Scheme?
Hi! I just wanted to thank you for the review (Heaving Ardor), but I looked through your portfolio (you're new, right? welcome to yws!!!) and saw this! :D It was ...
Jul 8, 2009 -
Re: Time has Overtaken Us
Didn't sound forced to me, dear! :D Love it! I like this so0o0o0o much: At least we've failed at nothing, For we've never tried; And so no perjured hope, Has ...
Jun 10, 2009 -
Re: Racism.
First of all, I credit you for writing a poem of substance! I love that it has a social impact and that it get's people to think. Anyway, every good ...
Jun 10, 2009
