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Re: The Valley and the Mountain
I'm not gonna review to critique, but I just want to say that this type of work is beautiful and personally something I needed! I really struggle with my fears ...
Nov 23, 2015 -
Re: Too Much
thanks for the comments! I'll work on making my diction a little more uniform. Our teacher told us about iambic pentameter (stressed/unstressed), but it's a concept I really don't get ...
Nov 21, 2015 -
Re: Eternal Ties, Chapter 2.3
would really love a suggestion on how to change Clause's dialogue. I don't know how to capture his attitude when he's mad at Will without sounding too... modern
Nov 19, 2015 -
Re: Band Instrument Studies
Ok, actually LOLed at "DUT DUT DUT"
Nov 14, 2015 -
Re: The Shapeshifter: Child Of The Wolf
OK cool! Yeah, just watch out for that, there are a few lapses into third, and make sure you separate each character's new dialogue into its own paragraph. Other than ...
Nov 2, 2015 -
Re: The Shapeshifter: Child Of The Wolf
I'm a little confused. Is this supposed to be written in first person? Or did something happen to the main character's thoughts?
Nov 1, 2015 -
Re: Super Mom(opinions plz...for a scholarship contests)
Like Ronald, I'd like to see the guidelines you had for writing this before I review. However, I would recommend dividing this up into paragraphs- at least two, if not ...
Oct 28, 2015 -
Re: Weird Crap Writers Do
LOL I loved this!! (had to delete my history when I was researching how to poison a character on my school laptop) Thing I don't relate to is eating while ...
Oct 28, 2015 -
Re: Eternal Ties Chapter 1
Thanks for the review for catching those errors! (yeah I did mean 'come on'). I'll be sure to clean up the part about Jessiah and Clause. Glad to hear you ...
Oct 28, 2015 -
Re: Eternal Ties Chapter 1
Thanks for the review for catching those errors! (yeah I did mean 'come on'). I'll be sure to clean up the part about Jessiah and Clause. Glad to hear you ...
Oct 28, 2015 -
Re: Eternal Ties Chapter 1
Thanks for the review for catching those errors! (yeah I did mean 'come on'). I'll be sure to clean up the part about Jessiah and Clause. Glad to hear you ...
Oct 28, 2015 -
Re: Finding the Pen Again
Ok sounds great! I didn't understand the design behind the interruption (though I'm sure someone who knows the reference would), but it was certainty effective :)
Oct 28, 2015 -
Re: Sanguinem
Hey tigeraye! backroads here- just a quick comment. I really love your story so far and intend to read more later!! - If there is a code among the assassins ...
Oct 25, 2015 -
Re: The Dust of Worlds: Chapter One
sorry I screwed up the quote coding on this one!!
Oct 20, 2015 - Re: The Dust of Worlds: Chapter One Oct 20, 2015