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This is a piece of class, right here. Just thought I'd use my first post in three years or so to let you know that.

All I felt was missing to be honest was that maybe you could have broken the dialogue up into speech marks, but It still flows without them. It was pretty ...

Veeery funny :)

There was at least one comment that it might be better to take rhyming out. I just want to check, would that entail hunting them and exterminating them? I'm guessing ...

2) "I sleep alone—waiting for the world to rotten." This is an excellent ending, but "rotten" is usually an adjective and not an adverb. Maybe: "I sleep alone—waiting for the ...

Cheers for your crits, guys. For those of you who want to hear my awful voice reading this out loud (just for the rhythm and all!) this link, should work, ...

ooh, gosh, it's been a while since I saw this one. I still like the idea, though I'm not entirely sure whether the execution (execution... heh... geek humour) was quite ...

@ bubbly : I think you're missing a "his" in the 4th to last line face/palm. Yes, I am! Cheers. the overuse of the word "trickle" in stanza 1 Using ...

Ooooold poem. Very old. Old old old. (good memories, though)

Mmm, if only - I think Brad takes those honours, myself.

A blast from the past, eh? Our capital-friendly friend here seems to have a few necromantic habits.

Cheers m'dears, you make an old hack happy. Perhaps I'll be able to redraft upon your instruction :)

EDIT: duh, brain slow - it should be "child support or some love" - damn typos.

Much obliged for the comments, folks, thanks for all the positive and constructive feedback :)

I would say if you're not into philosophy, you're not into living.