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Heya raven. Well, it's certainly good to know you're not thinking of killing yourself. That'd suck, I have to say. I don't really like how your poem is put together. ...

I find the critiques on this site interesting, always have. And what I find particularly of note is that there are actually people who seem to like pretty much anything, ...

Poetry can be classed in many different ways, so if you think it goes here, I'm sure it will be fine; equally, I'm sure it would do fine elsewhere. It's ...

Ah, an interesting idea. You might be interested to note that it has been done several times in the past, though obviously not quite with your words! One of the ...

Hey there Gadi, good to see you around and all. Style is an interesting thing - certainly you're free to experiment with different types of poetry, but I think you'll ...

Liz! I'm not quite sure why I started like that, but it's OK: your name seemed in my mind to require an exclamation mark. First and foremost, your title is ...

I claim first comment! Not easy these days :) Right, let's start with the basics: you could do with cleaning up your grammar. "heavens way" should be "heaven's way" for ...

A jointly-composed poem :) teamwork at its finest! Now then, about your poem: I think it needs some work, but I also think its got potential to be an incredibly ...

An interesting piece, surprisingly refreshing for its subject! It's not something that is written about often, and as such it catches the attention and makes you take notice, always a ...

the wonder capitalise the 't'. You need to look more closely at it, m'dear: it's a new stanza, but not a new sentence, it carries on from the previous one. ...

Right-o! Let's start with the basics, your technique. First of all is your form and structure, which need a bit of work. Basically what you have here is a short ...

I believe that all a poem needs to be moving is one good line, one line thats just filled with feeling. Sadly for those of us in the business of ...

Ah, interesting. I confess that, while the surface had a good deal of beauty to it, this poem really didn't do it for me. Now, I'm a great lover of ...

Oh, bravo! This is a excellent effort and no mistake, I can tell it's been put together with a great deal of thought and solidly exercised technique. I don't mean ...

My only niggle with your revised edition is the "because" in S3 L2. It's not horrible or anything, but the flow of the rest of the poem is so good ...