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Hi... sorry it took so long for my rebew... I forgot to check the WRFF forums... Well, I'm here now, so Here goes! Your first sentence if good. I like ...

Okay, first of all, this is good. The first sentence catches my attention, and the second states what you are here for and what you are doing. You need to ...

The sunrise cast a momentary orange glow, before the remains of the snow reflected it and produced an eternal brightness, sighing I turned back into my room, and swept over ...

Okay... first of all, you have serious issues with grammar. I'm sure that someone else has already pointed that out though. Just things like missing commas and full stops - ...

Okay. Well, it looks like you have the grammar covered by Pippiedooda and Dreamwalker, so I'll skip that and try to give you the best review I can on your ...

I think that twilight is good - and I'm not one for romance! I wasn't too bothered about the words 'stunning' and 'dazzle', as the plot made up for it. ...

I have just finished 'Life as we knew it' - Susan Beth Pfeffer. I would really recommend it to you - or anyone for that matter - because, even though ...

Hello, Thank you for replying to my 'will review for food' thread. I'm just going to do as best as I can, as it is Easter Friday, and I have ...

Hey! Thanks for the PM! can you give me another when the next part is up? I don't get why you stress over this one either - it was fine. ...

Hello. review as requested! He doesn’t say anything at first. He just examines her for a minute. She is no longer holding his hand. He says: -Angela. Just listen… -What? ...

Okay... just one thing I noticed... how old is declan? Older or younger? Also, I don'tthink that you mentionsed anythign about what she does for work here eiother... It's been ...

Hi! Thanks for the PM! :arrow: First of all, this sentence caught me out: An old lady lowered her gaze and tightened her hold on her bag as I passed ...

Okay, just a quick one here - because of your quick prologue! :arrow: Okay... first of all, you have long sentences in the beginning... when you describe why you might ...

Hi, first, I would like to say that you have a wonderful piece of writing here! Nice work! but the flicker flicked it off. Try and not use 'flick' twice ...

Wow, just to point this out - it's a bit long. Story's like this seem intimidating to the reader, you might want to break it up into two parts, or ...