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  • Poetry » Realistic, Narrative Re: I Heard He Said She Said I'm a Slut

    Hello there I'm ashpandas, and I really really liked this. You did a great job. My only comment is I think in some places there are flow issues through out ...

    Oct 16, 2017
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Always There

    Hello!! I like this I like the concept and wording and I only have a couple notes "No matter which I turn, you're there." Maybe "Where" instead of "Which" or ...

    Oct 16, 2017
  • Short Story » Romantic, Dramatic Re: Hazel

    Hello there, I'm ashpandas. I like the concept of this piece, but that being said I personally think it needs a lot of work. It has a lot of run ...

    Oct 16, 2017
  • Short Story » Humor, Dramatic Re: Window Sill

    Hello there... I'm going to get into my comments right away cause I have more than a few and then tell you how I feel. "It hasn’t stopped drizzling and ...

    Oct 13, 2017
  • Short Story » Dramatic, Realistic Re: Hater

    Holy crap... This was dark and sad and good and man... I feel this on a huge personal level. I feel like beginning to end it really ties together. I ...

    Oct 12, 2017
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Literature Re: Free

    OK so I like the concept but I think it has a lot of errors. A few flow and grammar issues, also I think in some parts you add too ...

    Oct 11, 2017
  • Poetry » General, General Re: The day that's not today.

    Hello there, I think you did a good job. I like the over all theme and meaning behind it. I think a lot of people could relate to it. And ...

    Oct 11, 2017
  • Poetry » Realistic, General Re: Purpose

    Wow this was deep and very very good. I could also feel it on a personal level. I liked the flow I think and how the message is always clear ...

    Oct 10, 2017
  • Poetry » Realistic, General Re: Next Stop: Chula Vista

    Now I don't know much about poetry, but I did find this interesting. I like it. I like how it's formatted, I think it flows really well too. it doesn't ...

    Oct 6, 2017
  • Poetry » Romantic, Realistic Re: I Wondered and Wondered

    Good work, I like what you did hear. I can very clearly see what you are trying to show and I like that. I do on the other hand have ...

    Oct 5, 2017
  • Short Story » Horror, Realistic Re: Wildfire in a Wildfire

    Wow this was something, something good so don't worry. I liked what the story was about, and for the most part it's good. I just have a couple comments. "I ...

    Oct 3, 2017
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Gone

    Hello, Id like to start with I really liked this, because it's something I personally can relate to. I like how vivid it was, and how anyone that has lost ...

    Oct 3, 2017
  • Poetry » Realistic, General Re: Snowflakes

    Ok so first things first I think this is really cute, and good for a fifth graders work. It kind of reminds me of a poem I wrote in fourth ...

    Sep 28, 2017


History repeats itself. First as tragedy, second as farce.
— Karl Marx