Hi, this is ZeldaIsShiek here for another review on some bombastically expressive poetry on some totally valid and important points that needed to be addressed! I'm also here to earn some quick points for Review Day and to make your writing better as a whole. Now that we have expressed my motives and what I'm going to do here as a whole, why don't we get into yours? I'm sure there's a lot to cover, so let's get right into it!
One thing that I noticed about this is how the first line is separated from the next line, which seems odd to me, and I'm not sure if it's an error or a choice. Either way, it's pretty interesting, and I wonder what all of it could mean... It definitely seems like you are in a relationship with someone who does not want to be in the relationship, and you are being urged by someone who cares about both of your to let them go for both of your sakes. This is made clear by the line within the poem, the title, and the description. The freedom you must give to your partner is the same freedom you will have after you let them go.
I am have no grammatical or nit-picky things to say about your poem. It was just a good poem in general, and I think it is very inspiring. Hope to see you again soon!
-ZeldaIsShiek
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