ashleylee

Oh, this was sad. And yes, this is in the right place. This is the only thing I would change: The playful fights that turned into not-so-playful fights. Instead of ...

Interesting. I only noticed one tiny thing: Laughter floated through the air to my tiny ears. A small girl in a summer dress ran past me her curly red hair ...

I thought there was a little bit of rambling going on here but other than that, I thought it was decent. Don't judge me on that though because I'm not ...

Wow. This was really beautiful. It showed the contrast between the two people and the major impacts these differences make on their lives. All I have to say is that ...

I could feel the emotion with this one. I thought this was good and it flowed really nice. Also, this is to SimonCowellLover. Poems can be stories. Sometimes, that's the ...

"Wow" pretty much sums up this poem. This was an amazing piece of literature.*stares in complete awe* This is a really amazing poem. The end was so suprising and yet ...

I agree that making the Grim Reaper to mean something else is really creative. This poem is so full of imagery and I can really picture what is happening. I ...

I really, REALLY liked this. You write so well! And there really isn't anything else for me to say since there is nothing I noticed to fix. Which is good! ...

Hey, this was funny :lol: Sometimes poem like this are just made to make people laugh. And you accomplished that so good for you! :) My only advise for you ...

Okay, I thought this was just a really cute story. That was adorable how she was so nervous and yet he liked her anyway. :) There were only a few ...

Just a few nit-picks The man stood there, completely at ease. The glare of the lantern overhead made his black hair shine, but his brown eyes were dull as a ...

Wonderful, as usual, kels. And I totally think you should go for your previous idea! That's just perfect! :) This story makes me so sad though. How those boys are ...

There are a lot of mistakes in this for one. A lot of capitals you missed and spaces you needed. Simple yet important things that make the story. Other than ...

This is sad. But extremely well written. You give us insight into this girls head but with that, I think you could give us even more insight. You gave us ...

You really did well with this one! I mean, you said you didn't give them names on purpose but I think they don't need names. You made it so it ...