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Re: Silent River
Hey, I'm copy/pasting again! It was a peaceful, silent, autumn day. The leaves were abandoning their homes and gently gliding to the ground. [
May 17, 2008 -
Re: Collision
Hello! I don't think I have seen you around here before...So, welcome to YWS! Hope you like the site! :D I must say that this story is SUPER SUPER long. ...
May 17, 2008 -
Re: Chapter one AGB
Okay, oviously I'm not going to copy/paste this story! :wink: lol But, right off, I want to point out to you that you need to space this out more. The ...
May 17, 2008 -
Re: Wolf Island Road
I'm sorry. I know it bugs some people when I copy/paste their work but it is just SO much easier to correct when I just can write something and then ...
May 17, 2008 -
Re: A Gentle Breeze
Oh my! This was really sad. But I liked it so that's a plus! :wink: I can't really give you a proper review right now since I'm short on time. ...
May 15, 2008 -
Re: First Drink
Short, yes. A lot to critique on, no. But Interesting and different, YES! It is a little too short to really mention anything about it. I seemed like a random ...
May 14, 2008 -
Re: An important letter.
Melkor: I have read the first few lines of your story and I really REALLY like it. You drew me in right away... I, regretably, don't have time for a ...
May 14, 2008 -
Re: That Summer ( edited )
Hello, All my corrections are in bold... Heart churning, running free down his favorite prairie path [comma] James Anes was feeling two mighty different feelings. The perfect blue sky above ...
May 13, 2008 -
Re: Beginning
Wow...wonderful job! :D You wrote beautifully and in a different style then I have ever encountered before. You told a story but in a unique way...I like it! I can't ...
May 13, 2008 -
Re: A touch of Chaos
Okay, this is a little too short for me to really post a long review. Above me ^^^, the others seem to have touched on everything that you need to ...
May 13, 2008 -
Re: A Beautiful Mess
Hey! :D Here are the things I saw: “So there I was, sitting on the floor trying to hid the huge cottage cheese stain on the carpet.” Kate put her ...
May 13, 2008 -
Re: Two Stars in the Night Sky
Yes, you totally need to space this out. I read the first part but it was too confusing for my eyes. *vision blurs from the effort to try to read* ...
May 12, 2008 -
Re: Pulling Tides
Hey, Okay, all my corrections are in bold... "Hannah Erins! Are you gonna answer the question?" went the raspy, old vioce of Mrs. Cooley, [okay, you need to start a ...
May 11, 2008 -
Re: Garden of Hideous - Chap. 1
Very Good :D I don't have time for a proper review but I will go on tonight and fix everything that I saw. There was only a few grammatical things ...
May 8, 2008 -
Re: .
Okay, I just copy/pasted this and wrote all my corrections in bold: The wind pulled my hair across my face covering my eyes and the tears that rolled down my ...
May 8, 2008
