ashleylee

Good Work :D I seriously could imagine everything that was happening in this story. It flowed so well, it made it so easy to read. So, you made my job ...

Okay, I read the first part before the : **** and I liked what I read! :D But, can you please do me a favor and cut this at least ...

This was really powerful. I mean, gossip is something I must admit that I have divulged in more times than none. And believe me, it can definetly make you toss ...

This was really good! :D I must admit that I didn't read every single word but it had a good plot. Sorry but it was too long to really give ...

God, this was fricken' hilarious! :lol: I even laughed openly at certain points! And it was true, genuine. It wasn't the fake stuff some people right. I could feel for ...

Oh, this is so emotional and sad! :( You really got in-touch with the MC's emotions here. And you did a wonderful job! :D I am guessing that this is ...

Hey, this was different! :D A mermaid story...you never see those.... I must agree with KJ that your hook was kind of flat. You need to catch us and pull ...

My first suggestion to you would be to post the chapters seperately. It was too much to read all at once. (however, I did read all the way to the ...

Aww...typical girl likes boy but boy likes best friend. But, it was still really cute. It really is too short for me to say anything else. You have the MC ...

Vampy_Girl! I frown heavily on the shortness of this chapter! It is way WAY too short for my taste! :wink: But that's just me... Umm, I must comment on a ...

Hiya! Here I am again! :D Pretty much all my suggestions in the Chapter 1 Part 1 review is the same here. Punctuation, MC, the other characters, and the "she ...

Hello again Vampy_Girl! I must be honest with you. This chapter was sort of a let down. I mean, from your prologue to was just a tad bit dry. Now, ...

Hey Vampy_Girl15! I must tell you this right now that I agree with deavarna_satina that I am a sucker for vampire love stories. So, I already love this story, just ...

umm WOW! This was really REALLY good! :D You are an AMAZING writer. Gosh, I feel unwanted as I am out of a job. There is nothing to correct in ...

Hello Jiggity! I don't think I have ever commented on your writing before...so, here is my first review! (all I did was copy/paste and all my corrections are in bold) ...