asadderandawiserman

I thought it was very interesting, but I was a bit confused about some aspects of the plot. Was Hannah working with the stranger that she kissed, or was she ...

This reminded me a lot of the Aeneid at times, which is pretty impressive. Overall I thought it was enjoyable an well written, but there were a few problems. The ...

I really like this poem. Well, like isn't exactly the right word, since it's dealing with some stuff which is far from upbeat, at least until the end. But I ...

This, I like. It's very optimistic, which is a breath of fresh air from a lot of the poems on this site (no offence to any of the more downbeat ...

So, I've looked up slam poetry and apparently it's spoken poetry which is great, because, for me, the way it is recited is a very important part of poetry. However, ...

The world you've created here is really interesting! I love the clash between the military and religious aspects, they make for a unique combination. There are quite a few nitpicks ...

For some reason, I always find brackets powerful in your poems. I think I said the same thing when I reviewed 12:05 am. I think it's probably the lack of ...

This was a pretty intriguing opening, but unless you want to appeal only people who participate in chess competitions I would strongly suggest that you at least mention that it's ...

Wow. I've never read anything like that before. I know that sort of comment is usually used as a euphemism for: "It's rubbish, but I don't want to tell you." ...

I think your writing style shows a lot of promise. The description is generally good and what little dialogue there is seems natural. It does seem like this piece of ...

I really like the style of you're writing. It's fairly concise, so it doesn't go overboard on unneeded detail, but there's enough description to make the characters and setting seem ...

This is a really powerful poem. I feel that it really captures the worst thing about cancer: that it feels like something inside of you rather than an invading foreign ...

It's a shame to let twilight spoil vampires for you, they can be a pretty interesting topic. I really enjoyed this, mainly because of the snowy setting which I felt ...

I think this works very well as a prologue. At the moment, I haven't got the faintest clue what the story will be about, but I'm interested and a little ...

Pfft. It doesn't even rhyme or anything! Just kidding! I really like this poem. I think most of us can relate to that time of night where logic leaves you ...