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Happy Review day! I'll start by saying I find your concept intriguing. I like the eyes being color-coded to their powers and her being unaware of what her eye color ...

First off, I love your writing voice. You established your character's voice within the paragraph, which was fantastic. It made me want to keep reading. It gave me a great ...

Hiya! So I haven't read the other chapters, but that also means I'm coming with a fresh perspective, and can focus just on how you development your characters and story ...

Hey there! I love how you've taken a sort of never-ending "conflict" between Christians and Atheists and given it a new, thought provoking twist. Not only that but you've fleshed ...

Hey Pendr! I love that you wrote Merlin fanfiction. And I'm a big fan of original characters, so I'm excited to see how this develops. I know asking about more ...

Hey there. I liked your rhythm. It was unique but still consistent, which gave your poem a nice flow. I found this part a little akward though. "Through the cobwebs, ...

I smiled amicably, bowing lowly to my next guest. I'm wondering what culture their from, since bowing isn't a typical greeting gesture at a family reunion where I'm from. I'm ...

Happy review day! A hot steamy shower helps a lot after a long day. I don't understand why this sentence was italicized. italics are usually to show emphasis, so why ...

I loved the how-to format of this short story. I feel like I was reading a really strange wikihow on the internet. In fact, I bet you could publish this ...

I found this searching for flashfiction and saw that it had no reviews. Hopefully you wanted reviews, because I'm about to give you one. And I'm going to somehow make ...

Hey confusedglasses. I'm pretty sure you've reviewed my work before, so now I get to return the favor. In a size much smaller than the rest of the text, was ...

Hi falconer! Happy review day. My first comment is to consider putting direct character thoughts in italics. This can make for a smoother read, especially when it's in third person. ...

Hello queenofhearts. Happy review day. I love the lore you've put in this. It's exciting and beautifully described. When I reach the top of the stairs, a worried looking priest ...

I had a revelation about Sam. The very first scene with him is him being a joker in class. You've definitely set him as the funny guy, which make shim ...

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I had a revelation about Sam. The very first scene with him is him being a joker in class. You've definitely set him as the funny guy, which make shim ...