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Nice! It's really good! I like how it rhymed and what the poem was about. :D

I love it! The poem has lots of emotion in it and meaning. It's really good. I like the rhyme too.

The story was quite interesting but i was quite confused while reading it.

Thanks! Sorry but who do you agree? You agree with her? Yeah, I don't like snobby rich people either. :D

You found 30 mistakes?! I didn't see a single one! But people can easily over look a simple mistake. We won't spoil the ending for you then. But it's really ...

Yeah, the two are probably going to be Roman ones. Cause Percy, Annabeth, Leo, and Piper are all Greek demigods, so they need Roman demigods other than Jason. And that's ...

It's a great song. But there's a lot of chorus. You might want to add more, cause it can be a little boring if it's just the chorus. There's lots ...

Great poem! I like the message. This is great. Can't wait for more! Keep writing.

I have another friend who read this chapter and she thinks that since it's a legend it shouldn't have too many details. I see what you mean about the yelling ...

This is pretty good, but you can hear that the rhyme was forced. It's really good other than that though. Keep writing, it's great!

I like the emotion and the feeling you put in there! It's great! There were good metaphors too. Keep writing!

Great! There's a lot of emotion in this poem. I like it! Keep writing, it's really good. You might want to change "despite" to "despise" It's great though!

The names are Japanese, but I have a reason for using them. For the 2nd chapter, I didn't use Japanese names. And also, the chapters switch point of views. It's ...

This is a great poem! I like the phrases you used. Don't be nervous about your works, their really good!

Great so far! There are a few mistakes though. But it's great. Keep working on it!