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I like this. It makes me want to know what comes next. Thats what I really look for in a story.

Great its totally strange. and written great. (unlike that sentance)

I like it, now im not one to tell you any actually fixure uppers like sentance structure or what nots. beacuse if there is once thing im REALLY bad at ...

How can i put this...LOOOVVEEE IT! Thats all there is to it

kool. i liked this alot.

hey thanks to the both of you. Im going back to day and writing a revise than i'll post it and see if thats anybetter.

I like this alot. good use of rythm

I liked it, it was good. thought i too got lost in some places.

Ok i have to say that i really like this poem too. As has been said. Im not sure of the meaning. But still i liked it.

I agree, it does flow better. I like it. good job

Yeah what he said, Other than that i'd have to say i like it alot.

Thanks for all your help. And Bringin back sexy, The mother is soposed to talked that way, It goes with the plot of the story. Although i see what you ...

Umm what more can be said? Other than i liked it, and agree with gummy

I really love this poem too. Like Gummyface said the lines where swift, and discriptive. And showed that dancing was meaningful to you.

I really liked your poem. I havent read your other poems so i can not compare. Though i do like that this poem is very clear with showing emotion. Great ...