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  • Poetry » General, Romantic Re: Burn

    Hey hey Ali!!! Ardent! here for a reviews (so u shush in discord :P) First off, I'm currently listening to Victoria by Abney Park, which is kind of mood™ for ...

    Sep 29, 2017
  • Poetry » Narrative, Dramatic Re: get back up

    Hey hey, Ardently! here for a quick review between exams!!! Ooooh I'm a fan of this! It's a concept that gets used a lot in poems, but you did a ...

    Sep 17, 2017
  • Short Story » Mystery / Suspense, Supernatural Re: Mother

    Hey hey, Ardently! here for a quick review between exams!!! I like your first paragraph. It sets the scene well and gives us a little bit of an idea of ...

    Sep 17, 2017
  • Short Story » Dramatic, Mystery / Suspense Re: I Dreamt I Was Dying

    Hey hey, Ardently! here for a review so that YWS will stop recommending my own works to me.. First of all, I like this story a lot! It's a nice ...

    Sep 16, 2017
  • Poetry » General, General Re: The Ship

    Hey hey, Ardently! here for a review!! I'm going to be completely honest, from your title I thought this was somehow related to the game where you have to murder ...

    Sep 14, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » Fanfiction, Fantasy Re: The Elder Scrolls: Escape ~ Prologue

    Hey hey, Ardently! here for a review!! Saw your latest chapter in the green room and was like "hey cool, an elder scrolls fic". Then I realized how many other ...

    Sep 13, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » Realistic, Dramatic Re: war and his eyes (alternative beginning)

    Hey hey, Ardently! here for a late night review!!! (should I be sleeping? Yes. Am I going to keep reviewing? Also yes) I see the technical errors (grammar, punctuation etc.) ...

    Sep 12, 2017
  • Short Story » Realistic, Narrative Re: Dreams

    Hey hey, Ardently! here for a late night review!! Ya know what? Let's do this each lil story bit at a time. "Imagination is the reality of the dreamer."-- Scott ...

    Sep 12, 2017
  • Article / Essay » General, General Re: Showing and Telling - How to Tell Effectively

    Hey hey, Ardently! here for a review!! Figured reading this will give me pointers AND let me work closer to my sweet, sweet RevMo success and second star, and hey! ...

    Sep 12, 2017
  • Short Story » Teen Fiction, Realistic Re: Birthday Cards

    Hey hey, Ardently! here for a review!! First off I wanna say that I like the idea behind this piece. The death of a family member who you never had ...

    Sep 12, 2017
  • Poetry » Realistic, Culture Re: Goals

    Hey hey, Ardently! here for a review!! Gonna try a new format this time, so that's exciting. Where I agree with my fellow reviewers First of all, I (pun sort ...

    Sep 12, 2017
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Narrative Re: Is that okay?

    Hey hey, Ardently! here for a review!! Ah yes, the lovely 5 minute poem, a writing thing I am maybe a little too familiar with. I do think you could ...

    Sep 12, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, Action / Adventure Re: As Darkness Falls - Act I, Scene 1

    Hey hey, Ardently! here for a review!! Ok, so when I saw this in the green room, I was really interested. I figured that as a Knight of The Green ...

    Sep 12, 2017
  • Novel / Chapter » Historical Fiction, General Re: once upon a time in havana part 1

    Hey hey, Ardently! here for a review and welcome to YWS!! It's always exciting to read the first works of new members, especially when they're still in the green room. ...

    Sep 11, 2017
  • Poetry » Narrative, Realistic Re: The Phoenix Has Risen

    Hey hey, Ardently! here for a review!!! First of all, welcome to YWS. It's always great to see new members, and even better getting to read what they're written. And ...

    Sep 11, 2017


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