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I loved this piece. I actually got chills reading this, and that is mostly because i can relate. I agree with Nightowl about the sacrafice line, it doesn't make much ...

I love this piece. Its message is really well written and played out. I especially liked how you repeated the idea of one thing to another to another, it helped ...

Very nice piece. The idea your trying to express was well chosen and written. I have to say the only thing a tad off was your fluidity. The line in ...

This is such an intresting piece, and very well written. There is alot of imagery which is what makes it so enjoyable. Your rhyme scheme works really well for what ...

Really well writen. You grasped the idea that not very women manage to get about themselves, which is believing in oneself. My only advice is formating. you need to indent ...

Very well written. Its got so much raw emotion, and great ideas expressed. It doesn't have much imagry though. I can't really picture the baby or the flower and skeleton ...

This is really good, it filled with emotion. If it is really happening i am very sorry. Its very well written and the format works really well. The only thing ...

Its good, i love the feelings it gives. Its flow is kinda off because you go from not rhyming, to rhyming, then back. You might also want to consider looking ...

I like this piece of work. There are a few things though that need some work. When you first introduce the burgler, it reads as if the narrator already knows ...

I like the piece. But for me personaly it reads weird. Its mostly the punctuation all throughout. The title is creative, but it doesn't really tie in until the very ...

There are many reasons why I like this piece. The main one being the irony. You talk about your love for Hawai'i and how wonderful it is, comparing it to ...

Hi so I will be reviewing your work, as if that wasn't obvious. I wont be tedious with all the spelling and grammar errors but will just point out what ...

Intresting take on an apoclyptic event. I would have never thought lobsters could take us over. I especialy like the message that you were trying to send with this piece. ...

Very dark and i agree it is much like SAW. Your fonting and formating in this really helped move the story along and almost gave it life on its own. ...

This is an interesting story. You are very decriptive in the way you write. Sometimes though details can get in the way of telling the story. I noticed several instences ...