Dad,
I know. I know you're depressed. And I know how much it hurts. I know what it's like. And I know why you did it.
I just wish you didn't.
I know I should care. And I know that you need me. I know I'm being weak, but I just can't do this.
I have to stay away.
I have to stay away because if I come any closer I may tell you the truth. I know you hate me. Hey. Sometimes, I hate me too. And sometimes, I just wish you were gone. I just wish you would stop hurting me and walk away.
Why can't you forget about your daughter and just move on.
You can't blame me leaving. You can't blame me for your unhappiness. You can't hate me for living. You just can't.
But you do.
And I don't know why.
I'm sorry you think I am the reason you should kill yourself. And I am sorry you took all those pills yesterday.
You told me you didn't want me, and I left.
But you can't leave too. Not like this. Not because of me.
I'm sorry, Daddy. I'm sorry.
Please. Don't die on me now.
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Wow. This really is touching. I can tell you put emotion into your writing, and to this guy, it really pays off.
You got your story through to me and I loved reading it.
Keep up the great writing, I'll be sure to check out your future works
Thanks!
Gotta love emotional vent sessions every now and again.
Very moving :')
Thanks. :')
This is really good, it filled with emotion. If it is really happening i am very sorry. Its very well written and the format works really well. The only thing is i don't think you needed to repeat in "I'm sorry you think I am the reason you should kill yourself. And I am sorry you took all those pills yesterday. I'm sorry I was your reason." the last line. its just the same thing you said, and you have put enough emphasis on the idea by then. Still great piece.
I apologize for my angst in advance.
It happens to the best of us.