anniegirl123

Hey, Annie here for a review! Honestly, I felt like this story was way too short. Like... maybe you could have further elaborated on who the character was, or added ...

Wow, first I just want to say this is such a beautiful piece. I want to give you some constructive criticism, but I honestly saw nothing wrong with this story. ...

There was one problem with this statement "Stories said she once took an entire army of men without anyone knowing she was ever present." If no one ever knew she ...

This story was so great! I loved the imagery you used, it was very pretty. :D Just one thing I'm a little confused on. Where you say ""I’m… so sorry.” ...

First I just want to say that I loved the title. It really grabbed my attention and made me curious on what the story would be about. This story was ...

Wow, I really liked that, you did an amazing job! I felt like this was a really good portrayal of how people will change from being a little kid into ...

Where it says "The inhabitants were all believers in God, and they had fallen into the same trap as the Pharisees of the New Testament: they focused on the laws ...

Wow, even in the beginning Eddie was so angry and he had a right to be, though he did seem like a somewhat violent person, and I have to agree ...

Because it was just one big block of text, the story was a bit harder to read. You should put it into paragraphs, especially when someone speaks. Also I found ...

It was a good length for a prologue, but there were a few grammatical mistakes. One was.. "By my bewildered expression, clearly he knew I was to young to fully ...

First I want to say that I absolutely loved the imagery you used it the first paragraph, it was really good. Actually, your descriptions throughout the whole story were great. ...

Oh my gosh, that ending was so creepy! O.o This story was pretty well written. You had nice descriptions and I loved the surprise ending. The way the narrator finally ...

First I just wanted to say that I really liked your writing style. You had a good variety of sentences so nothing became dull or repetitive. I didn't even really ...

Welcome to the site! I hope you continue to write more things here. :) There was only one grammar mistakes in the first paragraph where you wrote, "Grasses on the ...

After your dialogue there should be some form of punctuation, such as a comma, exclamation point, or question mark depending on what the character is saying. For example, instead of ...