anirban

Nice work! Its very personal, direct and directive. However, this threw me off the track : "They tell me it is the hardest letter that it sounds like you'd wish ...

Greetings! First off, congratulations on the concept. The first thing I noticed 30 seconds into the poem was regular repetition of similar words/phrases. Though admittedly it is what happens when ...

Hi there, I guess it's the first time I'm reviewing your work, so I'd take a moment to welcome you to the YWS fraternity. Now let's get down to business, ...

Hi Vanessa, Since I haven't spoken to you yet I take this opportunity to welcome you to the YWS Community. Now lets head straight towards your brainchild. Simple yet wonderful, ...

Hi there, I'm Anirban and I'd be reviewing you work this wonderful night. I realize I haven't spoken to you yet so welcome to YWS and I hope you're having ...

Hi therealme, So lets begin, shall we? Lets start with the pros: > The plot was nice. It had potential and you exploited it well. > You drew the picture ...

This is really very well written. To start with, the concept was fresh and had a hint of originality. I like the way you use the loop as you say ...

I completely agree with @purplemoment. This piece is not even close to a satire. There were situations where you could've thrown in some irony but I know not why you ...

I really don't know what it is. The way you started was itself not correct : "Once upon a time there was a very sick boy. This boy%u2019s name was ...

Hi there, Well this poem, as I make out, revolves around Jack and his circle of friends. You've tried to portray their friendship through this piece which, to me, you've ...

Where is your piece buddy??

The plot was really good. There was a good connection. The characters were lively. The way you go on to unfold the story is commendable. The ideas were well executed. ...

A very intellectual piece. The way you've embedded two completely different themes into one is mind-boggling. I loved the concept. The flow was good. The middle was really good. The ...

Nice attempt but I could not understand the plot. You started off with a child and a recorder and it seemed like the story had something to do with the ...

Its a nice piece. It is more of an account than a short story. The way you go about the narration is good and the way you wrap it up ...