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  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: My Beauty

    Hi, firstly I would like to say that your poem is very easy to relate to. Every ones in a while we think how we would look like if we ...

    May 22, 2010
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Cheated on me

    This was deep! I really enjoyed this part: "Now I got you forever, and you wish that you never ever , girl you know you wish that you never... cheated ...

    Apr 8, 2010
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: As time goes by.

    I can't say anything different from the others. This poem had a smooth flow. I enjoyed every word :smt001 As for the tittle I think "As time goes by" would ...

    Apr 8, 2010
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: I Never Knew

    I really like this poem for the meaning it has. Especially this part which I found inspirational: " I never knew this road was so long, until I walked it. ...

    Apr 8, 2010
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Can you see me??? part 2

    Hi, this is the first poem I've seen that's this short; I like how its straight to the point and how it doesn't follow the basic syllable count and other ...

    Mar 2, 2010
  • Short Story » General, General Re: White and Black 3

    Hi, I really enjoyed reading this! I read the whole time without loosing interest and that's really good, really! I enjoyed how you waited till the last minute to let ...

    Jan 19, 2010
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Crazy Thin Cow!

    You have an interesting trail of thought and the tittle: Crazy this Cow? Aren't you the crazy one here? It was really funny though- how the narrator wants to kill ...

    Jan 19, 2010
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: haiku

    I liked it, very simple :smt001 and yet the imagery gets across just as good as it would in a complicated haiku. The syllable count is perfect and I wouldn't ...

    Jan 17, 2010
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Clean Your Room

    This is an amusing poem made me smile :). If this were true you know how many "Alice's" there would be confined in their room?Over all it was real nice, ...

    Jan 14, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Angels and Vampires-Part 7

    Hi I'm angel23 and I'm going to review your work :smt001 This review is quite long but it should help you out some! Well firstly I'm gonna start off by ...

    Jan 11, 2010
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: a hero of war

    Hi there :wink: today has been stressful ugh! OK so as I was reading along I really like the imagery you used and you're really appealing to peoples emotions!Over all ...

    Jan 5, 2010
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: i wish

    Hey its Angel23 :) I see your poem is quite popular, and of course I couldn't help but comment. So below you will see quite a few changes. Their just ...

    Nov 2, 2009
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: All We Know Is Falling.

    Hi this is a very nice piece you wrote.Alls I can say is watch where you place the commas. It can have a major effect on the rythm of the ...

    Oct 30, 2009
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: This Old World of Ours...

    I can see that you had an ardour topic in mind; religion and the human interaction are common topics yet complex to portray.I believe you should add more imagery to ...

    Oct 21, 2009
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Unsolved Mystery

    I am the type of person to focus more on the meaning of a work than on its grammar. In my openion if this were a book I would not ...

    May 25, 2009


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