alohajuice

Dude this was really cool. and fresh. It def. had energy to it. It read sort of like a rap like the guy above me said. My favorite line:But if ...

I stare at the white walls the silent tears drip from my face I look into the small mirror my face pale for not having seen the sun my light ...

Hello. I'm new to this community. This is my first entry. Thanks for reading :) ------------------------------ The Sea Contemplates the Moon There is no space between where your silver rim ...

This was very interesting. I wrote something similar to this so I wanted to check it out. I was impressed with your diction, your word choice stood out. My favorite ...

Long live our beautiful friendships With their laughs and miseries. The pain we now treasure Will forever live. Remember the times we laughed, The times we cried, And the times ...

oh my. simply beautiful. i have tears in my eyes. it was so simple and touching Best imagery ever. i have nothing to say but praise. each stanza evoked something ...

Are you native american? i really enjoy native am stories. i love their culture, most likely because jacob black is. but i thought this was good, your writing was good. ...

I love this. Its simple and tells a story. The chorus--Where are the times when I five swinging happiley on my old apple tree waiting for my nice hot tea ...

I might be the first to say I love this! it has a youthful voice but is mature. I loved everything about it! "Besides, you taste like sunscreen and embarrassing ...

It was a nice story. It kind of did scare me just a little bit. Make it scarier! I did have a problem with it. "Luckily my hand was over ...

the whole poem was tight but I did not fully understand what it was about. All I got was that this was about Tallgrass house. "sisters or brothers before Satan’s ...

It is a very pretty poem. Its not exactly polished but it does have an innocence about it that makes it stand out. This is good writing and i think ...

I don't believe that all poems need to have meaning. It was a nice reflection on oranges and i think it was an excellent poem having been written in middle ...

I don't understand the lyrics or the Boy's POV It could be very interesting depending on the music. But maybe re-write some of the lyrics if the music turns out ...

Its a nice funny song that would be fun to record for fun. If you're making an album maybe have it as a bonus track but not on the actual ...